Thursday, March 25, 2010

Chapter Two: Dr. Walters

Laura Dell felt as if the dark clouds followed in her wake as she walked backed to the Museum after lunch. The sun had bathed the museum throughout the morning, as Laura Dell had finished her rounds of the museum and set to sorting inventory for a new exhibit. It had been present on her walk to the Corner Bakery, conveying whatever minute warmth managed to penetrate the wind. But with every step of her return trip, the temperature seemed to plummet another degree; Laura Dell sensed that this must be the calm before the snowstorm she had heard described by some of the older interns. It would be the first time since she was eight years old that she had seen snow fall.

Siloam is familiar with all types of precipitation, rain is common and sleet and hail are consequences of the thunderstorms that tear across the state with some frequency, but snow in Siloam was like a myth. But in the winter of 1982, the stars aligned to grant the greatest wish of children everywhere in the South, and snow began to fall from the sky. She and John William had ignored the panicked run for milk and bread that seemed to occupy everyone over the age of eighteen; instead, seized the tops of their garbage cans and headed for the hill that sloped off behind the church. The entire town joined them there as they frolicked out in the miracle of winter.

The first flakes began to fall as Laura Dell was opening the door to the Museum, unable to resist, she turned within the doorframe to view the flakes that began erase the distinction in the city around her. A chirp above her head startled her, and she looked up in time to see a tiny bird fly into the museum, seeking shelter from the biting wind. Swiftly closing the door, Laura’s eyes followed the bird as is it swooped in and out the arches, looking for something familiar on which to land. Finding nothing, it instead sought height as its refuge, landing upon the hips of Sue.

Laura Dell sensed eyes on her, shivering in response; she sought the origin of the sensation, and found it in the form of her boss, Mr. Feinman. His hand beckoned her over in a sharp movement.

“Ms. Dell, do you realize that there is a small bird perched on top of Sue?”

“Yes, sir, I do.”

“I realize that you have only been with us three days, but we do not tolerate live animals within the museum. Have you any idea the damage that bird could inflict upon Sue? Its droppings could compromise the remaining structure of her skeleton. People are here to see preserved history, not a silly bird. Get rid of that bird before it becomes any more of a spectacle.”

“Yes, sir.”

Laura Dell walked around the base of Sue seeking an inconspicuous solution, instead finding, to her surprise, the older gentleman from earlier still sitting in the presence of Sue. After standing with him this morning, Laura Dell had asked Eddie about him. Eddie was almost as permanent an exhibit as Sue was at the Field Museum. He had been at the museum for over twenty years and knew everyone on staff and most of the regular visitors. Eddie told her that he usually came in several times a week. Most times, Eddie said, he just takes a seat on the bench by Sue, studying not only Sue, but the tourists as well. He never brought anyone with him, Eddie speculated that he was a bachelor, but he didn’t really know, and he always carried a notebook.

He seemed fascinated by the bird’s presence, perhaps amused by the contradiction of the small bird, whose ruffled feathers made it resemble an inverted cotton boll, atop the fossilized bone. He was writing in his little leather notebook, Laura Dell imagined he was commenting on this juxtaposition of life and death, of soft and hard.

As she continued to circle, she, like everyone else, became entranced by the magnitude of the theropod fossil. For Laura Dell, it revealed that the sparrow was safe from the malicious intent of Mr. Fienman. It’s scale rendered Laura Dell ineffectual to the museum, but Laura Dell felt grateful for this insurmountable obstacle. She could not help but sympathize with the little bird, it seemed impossible that the little sparrow would be able to survive amidst the callous and isolating weather of the Chicago winter.

A loud bang startled her out of her thoughts. It also started the sparrow, who took flight with an indignant chirp as it disappeared through an archway above. Laura and everyone else within Stanley Field Hall searched for its source. She located it in the old man she had been watching all day, who was picking up his cane with a sheepish expression.

“Sorry folks, not used to this fool cane yet,” he said to everyone around him.

Laura Dell approached him, feeling a sense of gratitude for the man who had solved her problem so innocently. “Can I do anything to help you sir?”

“Did the trick, didn’t it?” He asked, his eyes sparkling as John William’s did whenever he felt he had gotten away with some mischief.

“I’m sorry?”

“The sparrow’s off your dinosaur. That’s what you were after, yes? You were circling Sue with the expression of a predator looking for its best angle,” he said, a wry smile transforming his face, removing any trace of a docile old man.

“We didn’t want a little sparrow to distract people from the exhibits within the museum. They have come to see the wonders of life that went extinct sixty five million years ago, not a sparrow that they can see any day of the week. But thank you for your assistance; I did need to get the sparrow off of the exhibit.” Turning, Laura Dell began to walk back to the service desk to see if there had been any more deliveries for the new exhibit. She was troubled at how easily her answer had come to her and how much it resembled Mr. Feinman’s statements from earlier. She wanted to distance herself from the situation, but his voice forced her to turn back.

“You know they are still alive today,” he said, gesturing at the theropod with his cane, even as he stared at it.

Laura Dell had only been working at the museum for a few days, but had already been asked this question in one form or another a hundred times. But it usually came from the children, who believed in everything they saw and whose eyes and mouths always rounded out at the sight of Sue. “Jurrasic Park was just a movie sir. There are no living members of Dinosauria, most species died out around 65 million years ago, becoming extinct shortly thereafter.”

“You must be one of the new interns,” he declared, still staring at Sue.

“Yes, sir.”

“I thought so. I’ve never seen you here before, so you must be new. Here through June, I would guess?”

“Yes, sir. Unless they decide to offer me a job.”

“That idea is a hope perpetrated by all the interns; it’s as much of a myth as those depicted in that movie.” He finally looked away from the fossil to look Laura Dell in the eye. “But I have a feeling about you.” Using his regained cane as leverage, he stood up, extending his hand towards Laura Dell, “Herbert Walters.”

“Laura Dell.”

“It’s been a pleasure to meet you Ms. Laura Dell.”

“Mr. Walters-“

“Dr. Walters, got my doctorate in ornithology at the University of Texas, then moved up here, probably before you were born, to run the Chicago Ornithological Society.”

“I’m sorry, Dr. Walters, but I do need to get back to work. Mr. Feinman has me working to catalog the inventory for the new exhibit.”

“Well, I’ll get out of your way then, but remember, dinosaurs aren’t extinct. They live among us now but in a smaller, feathered frame like that song sparrow that’s been flying around the museum, who I assume is trying to take shelter from the snow storm. That tiny sparrow is a living descendent of that theropod over there. Always reminds me that even things we think of as insignificant can have impressive histories.” He donned his gloves, coat, scarf, and hat, which he then tipped at her, and holding the cane more than using it, strolled out the doors into the snow.

She watched him go, disappearing into the swirling snow. Only at his disappearance did it occur to her to ask him what he saw in her.

16 comments:

  1. Kasey - Terrific job in setting up Laura Dell's character right before Dr. Walters big speech. I LOVE the juxtaposition of the bird and Sue. Great job of tying in from one chapter to another. I really liked when you didn't have the reader's seeing Dr. Walters first thing on the 2nd chapter. It made me wonder where he was and when he was coming back. Meanwhile, lovely description of the snow! Especially the line, "...snow in Siloam was like a myth." I also really enjoyed your line about the permanance of Eddie. Nice touch.
    I only have one question, how old was Laura in 1982 - I am 23 and was born in 1987 - so I just wondered what age we had settled on. :) Lovely lovely job. Beautiful work, Kasey.

    :)Allie

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  2. Wonderful Kasey!

    I think we have a great direction going at this point. Your dialogue between Herbert and Laura Dell was insightful as well as captivating which is exactly what we want in order for our readers to be hooked into the narrative. I'm curious to see how our renegade sparrow will fare seeing that it is still stuck in the museum.

    As far as moving forward is concerned, we need to work out what a deepening conflict will be for our protagonists. Perhaps the absence of Herbert could cue into some kind of conflict, or Laura Dell struggling with the adjustment of being in a new culture, or a fossil goes missing or something. I'm just throwing some ideas out there.

    Kasey I'll echo Allie in the amazing setting work you did especially noting the flashbacks to snow in Alabama. So true! Thanks for your hard work and all the fun links!

    Cheers,
    - Megan F.

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  3. Great job Kasey! I too like the way you showed the contrast between the climates of Siloam and Chicago. Laura Dell and her background are becoming so developed! The second paragraph, the one describing the snow of ’92 is so beautifully written. It made me think even more fondly of when that actually happened! “The miracle of winter”---you captured it exactly!
    I loved everything about this chapter. The initial dialogue between Herbert and Laura Dell is well done, and I love the personality you have given him. He is very spunky and intriguing, and I hope we can all contribute to this persona in the following chapters. My only suggestion would be to clean up a few run on sentences; there are a few in the first few paragraphs. There were also a few typo’s: I think you meant “present” instead of “pleasant” in the first paragraph, and you left out the word “to” in the third paragraph in the phrase “that began to erase.”
    I think something else your chapter has established is the possibility for some strong symbolism with the bird and Herbert. I think we should use him as a living relic as well, just as he says the sparrow is. In future chapters, we could really develop this through some unique quality of his personality, perhaps that isn't commonly found in Laura Dell's generation. I kind of hate to say this, but Maybe Herbert needs to die soon after the bird does, further suggesting a symbolic tie.
    All in all, very well done!

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  4. Good job, Kasey. Agreeing with the comments above. Love Mr. Feinberg. He's got potential as a kind of narrative pressure. The links were fun, too. Thanks for those. I'm glad, too, that you flashbacked to Siloam again. It seems that John William is significant for us. I wonder if he'll turn up in Chicago...

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  5. Kasey-wonderful! I love the introduction of Dr. Walters and the way you developed Laura Dell's character more. I also like what you did with Eddie and Mr. Feinman. Your descriptions are beautiful! I think you've definitely given us some tension to work with as well, which I appreciate. Thank you for doing such a wonderful job!

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  6. Awesome job, Kasey. I really loved the way you introduced Dr. Walters, the sparrow, and Mr. Feinman (who I think is going to be a really annoying, bossy kind of boss later on. Just got that vibe). I also loved how you put the sparrow perched on top of this humongous dinosaur, which I thought added to the "insignificance" Dr. Walters is talking about.

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  7. Hey, look! More characters! Sweeeeeet.

    I like how we finally have the sparrow present. I also like how you compared Ol' Man Herbert to Laura Dell's brother, John William. This gives us a personal connection between the two to work with.

    Have we decided what the new exhibit is, yet? It could be another connection. Perhaps our dear Dr. Walters could actually be connected to it.

    Finally, I'd like to discuss perspectives. So far, we've written from Laura Dell's perspective. Obviously, this fits. I think it could be fun to periodically switch perspectives back and forth between Laura Dell and Dr. Walters. Could even switch a chapter or two over to Eddie and Mr. Feinman, although that could make this seem more like a collection of episodes instead of a complete story, if you know what I mean.

    I'm starting to wonder about how we're gonna do our conflicts. Class discussion may be required, or something.

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  8. Great second chapter Kasey.

    Dont know if you were going for this but I felt some connections between Laura and the sparrow which I felt was subtle and very well done.

    I agree with Allie as well I really like how you waited until close to the end of the chapter to introduce "Dr." Walters I liked the suspense that added.

    Anxious to see our internal conflict. Good set up

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  9. Great job!! I love the connection between Herbert and John William, I think that sets us up for some drama with the brother. I also like when LD makes the comment to Herbert about Jurassic Park and he immediately asks if she is an intern. That shows that he is familiar with this museum and the staff and the way things work for them.

    I'm interested to see why he spends so much time in the museum. He is knowledgable about the science world, but he seems to know this place really well. I think we could do a lot with his reason for spending so much time in this particular museum. Is he the old guy that everyone knows? Or has he kept to himself up til know?

    Good setup for a lot of neat options!!

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  10. Good job Kasey! I really like the interaction between Laura Dell and Dr. Walters. You've given him some spunk that will make for an interesting relationship between the two of them. I agree with what was stated above about maybe connecting Dr. Walters to the exhibit in some way. He seems to be someone she is going to learn from and involving him in the exhibit might be a way to do that. Again, I love the personality you have given Dr. Walters and I can't wait to see more about him.

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  11. Good job. The interaction between our two characters is interesting. Like the others I enjoy the similarity between John William and Herbert. Also this Feinman character is a good pressure on our protaganist. I am excited to see where this going.

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  12. ok, i am a dork and forgot that this was set in 1996 - scratch my age comment :)

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  13. I love the paragraph on Siloam. It really made me feel a connction to the town. I also felt the dialogue was very strong. The development of the characters is going great!

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  14. kasey,

    i'm excited about the way our characters our coming along, and especially excited that herbert is not a boring old man. great descriptions of the museum, and it sounds like we're already jumping into the meaning of the bird. good job.

    drew

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  15. i love the dialogue between herbert and laura dell and i'm glad she noticed how strongly her respose resembled mr. feinman's statement from earlier; i didn't like her response so i'm glad she got to talk a little more with herbert before leaving him. good job!

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  16. I liked “landing upon the hips of Sue.” For some reason, the hip was the best place for this. By the way, Feinman could mention that uric acid from the bird’s droppings could erode the bones.
    “Eddie was almost as permanent an exhibit as Sue.” Great linking of two objects.
    Chicago weather is in fact isolating. Couldn’t have piced a bertter word.
    Good time to introduce some dialogue.
    Can you make the sparrow a house sparrow instead of a song sparrow? House sparrows are almost always the ones that come inside buildings. You could even have Dr. Walters correct Larua on this.

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